A Sense of Sin

To lose a sense of sin may be
the greatest want.
The blooming actor who misses
her marks unaware is forgiven,
there will be another take.
Yet in that scene the play was pained
for someone or something on
that local horizon needed her
and she was not there.
If she is serious she senses this
and rehearses to
becomes a better noticer of detail.
If she is not serious she
unbecomes.
 

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7 Comments

  1. jodyo70 on October 8, 2015 at 5:21 pm

    “Becoming a better noticer.” Yes, that’s it. The closer I get to Jesus the more often I see where I fall short and the quicker I come to repentance. Keeping short tabs has taken a very long time.
    Well put, sir.

  2. Lorretta @Dancing On The Dash on October 8, 2015 at 6:20 pm

    “If she is serious she senses this” Yes.

  3. paula jones on October 12, 2015 at 2:16 pm

    1. “Becoming a better notice” is the pathway to becoming a mystic.
    2. “The play was pained for someone or something”––and my deepest hell has been when I knew I was responsible for the pain of others.
    3. “She was not there” and “she unbecomes” is both a beautiful parallelism and a tragic reality.
    4. Thank you once again. You skillfully play the strings of the human heart.

    • paula jones on October 12, 2015 at 2:17 pm

      Oops! “Noticer”

  4. Anita Mathias on October 13, 2015 at 6:42 pm

    Very nice! Thanks!

  5. RW on October 21, 2015 at 4:50 am

    a) this is lovely
    b) I miss your words more than you know. You show me God in a way that is like water to me. Thank you.

  6. Mary Jane on October 24, 2015 at 12:23 pm

    Ouch. I have left too much neglected. This was such a word “in season”, and one of your most demanding poems.” Please keep the words coming — they are bread.

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